tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5006495995784674502.post1975172970241117003..comments2023-10-19T08:02:36.500-04:00Comments on Blackbird in my Window: Submission #2 - Moving OnAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15651950963978497844noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5006495995784674502.post-27897505894613201172011-05-09T16:07:02.431-04:002011-05-09T16:07:02.431-04:00Great comments everyone. I prefer past tense, as a...Great comments everyone. I prefer past tense, as a writer… but don’t care either way from a readers stand point.Jeff Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667419764890599092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5006495995784674502.post-20652108947641330712011-05-06T12:35:21.198-04:002011-05-06T12:35:21.198-04:00Michael, you are right-semicolons have their place...Michael, you are right-semicolons have their place. But for me, they sit in my gut wrong because when I was first writing, I abused them as much as I do popcorn jellybeans. I especially used them in dialogue, which I got a lot of crap for. Since then, I'm very careful to use the perverted comma. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16253488881984985795noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5006495995784674502.post-79225661002479570922011-05-06T11:42:41.388-04:002011-05-06T11:42:41.388-04:00In addition to the tense change, I would have tigh...In addition to the tense change, I would have tightened the sentence 'but it seems to also echo' to 'but seems to echo'. Interesting snippet though!Jaynehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11309191526500602452noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5006495995784674502.post-89551799065597682962011-05-06T05:27:34.197-04:002011-05-06T05:27:34.197-04:00I missed the tense change. Darn! But I did pick up...I missed the tense change. Darn! But I did pick up this clunky phrase<br /><br />but it seemed to also echo...<br /><br />which wld be better:<br /><br />but seemed to echo...<br /><br />Darn!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04122270279975818113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5006495995784674502.post-88179246699866691702011-05-06T00:40:47.289-04:002011-05-06T00:40:47.289-04:00Really? I think semi-colons are a good tool to hav...Really? I think semi-colons are a good tool to have in your arsenal. Think about it. The standard comma and conjunction links the two clauses pretty tightly. Separating them into two sentences (or paragraphs or chapters or books) separates them quite a bit. But the semi-colon is a shade of gray between the comma and period. (That's why it's got both marks in it)<br /><br />I don't despise a particular screwdriver in my toolbox just because it's not used often. I might despise the person who uses that tool wrong, but my trusty screwdriver did nothing wrong. It's just a tool.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16518183823230864763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5006495995784674502.post-90540498511960804302011-05-05T16:17:35.218-04:002011-05-05T16:17:35.218-04:00Good job! You guys are exactly right. The author s...Good job! You guys are exactly right. The author started out a full page and a half and then switched tenses. So next question - which do you like better? Past or present tense?<br /><br />Clutzattack - I agree with you. I'm not a big fan of semicolons either. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16253488881984985795noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5006495995784674502.post-17344604537283061992011-05-05T15:57:09.129-04:002011-05-05T15:57:09.129-04:00You two beat me to it!
"Are...are you an an...You two beat me to it! <br /><br />"Are...are you an angel?" I ask tenatively. I wonder whether or not my sanity is still intact. In this place, I could see an insect and think it a king.<br /><br /><br />(Not a fan of semicolons)Kimberlee Turleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04695299361596799423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5006495995784674502.post-17065726549496259372011-05-05T15:39:27.764-04:002011-05-05T15:39:27.764-04:00There was the tense switching, but beyond that, a ...There was the tense switching, but beyond that, a misplaced comma and abuse of the word also were things I saw.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16518183823230864763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5006495995784674502.post-30245774339275104352011-05-05T15:06:22.837-04:002011-05-05T15:06:22.837-04:00She alternates between past and present tense.She alternates between past and present tense.Kimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09745302400759911758noreply@blogger.com