The entries I wanted to share with you are titled Death by High Heels, Sounding Waters, and Envy. Really look at how the authors managed to include all the makings of a great story in just a few short paragraphs.
Death by High Heels:
Not only did this have tension, but it was also funny. Loved it.
Seraphix was used to the awkward stares, but today felt different. From the moment the waterhole was in sight, she had felt a strong presence of eyes on her. She brushed off the paranoia and dropped her buckets on the ground beside the water.
“You‘re not like they say you are,” came a deep and unfamiliar voice.
She whirled around and for a brief second made eye contact with the man. She recognized him; she’d seen him here at the waterhole before. Turning her back, she continued dipping water into her buckets.
“I’ve wanted to tell you that for a long time, but I could never catch you without anyone else nearby,” he said.
Can you feel the tension in just a short amount of words?
Again, this one nailed it.
What do you guys notice about these pieces? What did they have in common?